Overview
This template gives feedback on a basic literary analysis essay that provides areas of strength, areas of improvement, and suggestions. Also, this feedback template uses overall ratings for each criteria (meets standards, approaching standards, below standards).
Context
This is a feedback template for a basic literary analysis given at the beginning of the school year focusing on writing basics.
Key features to observe
Specific examples are about a Kate Chopin text and The Crucible. You do not need to change the title of the text unless you want to.
When using this template, pay special attention to how it…
This template only asks for one strength, improvement and suggestion for each criteria. You can change this to get more of these identified.
Summary & recommendations
This is a feedback template for a junior Honors English class. This is the students' first essay of the year, so this feedback focuses on basic writing skills that we have been reviewing.
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# Highly Specific Feedback Template
[LLM Instructions: Use this template to provide detailed, specific, and direct feedback for each criterion. Always quote directly from the student's work when discussing strengths or areas for improvement. Provide one strength and one area for improvement for each criterion. Maintain a conversational tone, but avoid salutations, names, and repetitive phrases. Offer qualitative ratings, analyze all strengths and areas for improvement with exact references to the essay, and provide one actionable suggestion for each criteria. Vary your language and phrasing for each section to avoid repetition. Keep the tone supportive yet honest and direct throughout.]
## Criteria Evaluation
[For each criterion in the rubric, use the following format:]
### [Criterion Name] (e.g., Introduction with thesis, Body Paragraphs, Conclusion, Proofread)
Rating: [Qualitative Rating] (e.g., Below Standard, Approaching Standard, Meets Standard)
[Provide a comprehensive analysis of the student's performance on this criterion. Include multiple specific quotes from the essay, explaining exactly where and how the student demonstrated strengths or needs improvement. Relate the performance to the rubric requirements.]
Strengths:
[List one key strength, with a direct quote from the essay. Explain precisely why the quote demonstrates strength.]
Areas for Improvement:
[List one area needing improvement, with a direct quote from the essay. Explain precisely what could be improved in the quote and why.]
Suggestions:
[Provide one detailed, actionable suggestion for improvement. For the suggestion, explain exactly how it could be implemented in the context of the student's existing work.]
[Example:
### Introduction with thesis statement
Rating: Meets Standards
Your essay on Miller’s The Crucible demonstrates a solid understanding of how power is used in the story. Let's examine the specifics of your thesis and argument development.
Strengths:
1. Clear Thesis Statement: Your thesis,”Through her impulsive actions following the unexpected acquisition of fifteen dollars, Chopin explores themes of self-worth, longing, and the fleeting nature of happiness, revealing how societal expectations and personal desires intertwine in Mrs.Sommers' life” clearly outlines the main points of your essay and how you plan to analyze and prove it. This provides a strong foundation for your argument.
Areas for Improvement:
1. Depth of Analysis: While you identify literary techniques, there's room for deeper analysis. For instance, when you write, "The contrasting tones of excitement and disappointment are evident throughout the passage," you could delve deeper into how these tones are created and their specific effects on the reader.
Suggestions:
1. Deepen your analysis of literary techniques. For example, when discussing imagery, you could write: "Chopin’s use of imagery, such as 'shabby old shopping-bag’ and 'polished pointed-tip boots,' shows the contrast between Mrs. Sommer’s reality and a mother and her desire for personal indulgence. This imagery highlights the internal struggle Mrs. Sommers faces."
[Repeat this highly specific format for each criterion, varying language and phrasing to avoid repetition]
## Overall Rating
Rating: [Overall Qualitative Rating]
[Provide a detailed but no longer than one paragraph of 5-6 sentences explanation for the overall rating, tying it back to specific examples from the essay. Discuss how the strengths and weaknesses identified contribute to this overall assessment. Offer encouragement and specific insights into what would be needed to achieve a higher rating.]